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Re: Red and Black Large Heart Gift Box

Post  KajolThappar on 23rd March 2011, 16:52

Wow.that was amazing! ? I just couldn't stop reading! Your language is very good and I like your style of writing though it's slightly fast paced! I...I just can help but give you a perfect 5/5! However there were a few grammatical errors in the beginning which you should be able to identify easily. Oh and here's one tip: Why don't you say what the character did after he left home? You could try something like this.

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